I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Priththika, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I love how you have described the sights and sounds of the poppy field. Remember to keep focusing on the description (the details that you can imagine) rather than telling a story.
Kio Ora Priththika, I like your story and I like the background It's so cool! What kinda bugs you hate? Grasshoppers, Crickets or All of them? I hate mosquitoes.
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Kia ora Priththika, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I love how you have described the sights and sounds of the poppy field. Remember to keep focusing on the description (the details that you can imagine) rather than telling a story.
ReplyDeleteKio Ora Priththika, I like your story
ReplyDeleteand I like the background It's so cool!
What kinda bugs you hate?
Grasshoppers, Crickets or All of them?
I hate mosquitoes.
I like your work
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